2019江苏高考英语作文超精讲(合集两篇)
2019江苏高考英语作文超精讲
我对作文的一点看法
轰轰烈烈的英语考试拉下帷幕了。目前我只知道写作题,这已经足够了。下面我就来写一篇吧。
总体感觉是:今年作文有话可写,但不容易写好,因为需要积累不少和销售有关的表达。譬如如何表达商品销售、产品质量、误导等等。还有逻辑,如果你写反对,譬如如何论证排名会误导消费者,你就要举例等,蛮考验考生的逻辑思维能力的。
今年作文和模块四的第一单元话题比较靠近的,这个模块的词块对写作也有很大帮助。利弊类作文江苏已经出现过两年了,对于掌握了这两年范文的考生,起码在正文的结构上胸有成竹。
另外,本次作文题一个特点是:
短文简单易懂。这和去年的是一样(去年对话也是一看就懂,短小,不浪费时间)。这就是提示我们,平时练习不要在提供的短文上设置难度,尤其不可有生词,长度和难度是今后命题的一个重点。
过几天我会就整套试卷来一个全方位评析,包括写作。本篇只说如何写。
注意:范文属于本人写作王中王一书,版权所有,请勿商用。
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题目
第五部分:书面表达(满分25分)
请阅读下面文字,并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。
Li Jiang 6 July, Sunny
Our family will go on a trip next month and need asuitcase. Two days ago. Mom asked me to find relevant information on theinternet. But the information I got was rich and varied, or even contradictory. Confused, I simply based my decision on the ratings. Within five minutes, we ordered the one we were satisfied with. Thisafternoon, Mom received the case and told me she liked it very much.
Su Hua 6 July, Sunny
This morning, our family went out, hanging round in the downtown area. We found a rating of the Top Ten Restaurants, and went into one of them. We spent quite a lot of money, but were not happy. Mom complaineda lot, and said that despite its high ratings, the food was not to our taste. Iwas puzzled. Should I believe in these ratings, or should I not?
【写作内容】
1.用约30个词概括上述利用排名( ratings)进行消费的现象;
2.谈谈你如何看待消费排名,然后用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的看法。
【写作要求】
1.写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句;
2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.不必写标题
【评分标准】
内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。
一、如何写概括:
1.题干的关键词
关键词:排名( ratings)进行消费,这就是概括的核心。
2.段落的关键词
对于记叙文,一般有两种情况,一是举例;二是通篇一个故事。对于前者,只需要知道例子说明什么论点,对于后者,需要知道主要角色做了什么事,带来什么结果。
结合题干可知,要求概括现象,即两个例子说明了什么现象。切忌写例子里面的每个人发生了什么事。
两个故事都是对ratings的评价,第一个的评价:like it; 第二个评价:complaining。
3.关键词的替换
1. like it--> produce positive effects, a good impression
2. complain --> don’t meet needs, negativ eeffects, mislead
基本上概括不需要很复杂的句型,主要是把大意说明白:
先看2015年真题概括示范:
The traffic issue is a hard nut to crack. It notonly affects our everyday life, but may also threaten people’s lives. The threeselections presented above are typical examples.
我的写法:
Ratings for commodities are a double-edged sword.They can help consumers make sound decisions, but sometimes mislead them and bring about complaints. The two stories presented above are typical examples. (30个词)
我的心得:
针对现象的概括,不要具体写内容,重点是:现象是什么,一般都是什么趋势;结果或评价是什么,一般都是带来什么影响,支持或反对。
二、如何写正文
谈利弊的文章,江苏已经有两年了,分别是2016年的网络投票和2014年的汉语词典是否可以有英语单词。如果考生熟悉的话,会容易上手。
思维:我这里以反对为例:
1.从政府角度(可能涉及到法规,监管):
缺乏具体法规(there areno laws or policies and supervision)来规范市场排名
2.从商家的角度(可能涉及到责任):
过多广告投入,而不是质量(give priority to ads)
3.从个人角度:
盲目随大流(follow the crowd blindly)
思维有了,但还需要整合的:
前两个要点可以合并,政府缺少法规,导致商家可以不择手段来提高排名。其实也可以举例,譬如百度竞价排名,但写起来不容易。
关键是如何论证消费者只是盲目随大流,考生可能有两种思考:
1.消费者想当然认为排名代表了质量—》实际上质量高的很多产品因为投入不高无法参加排名
2. 消费者想当然认为排名代表了受欢迎度—》实际上产品只是定制部分消费者的,他们的体验被夸大而影响别人
第一个论据和前面第一个论点重复了,因为前面说的是质量,这里还是说质量;第二个论据就比较切合文章的第二个例子:the food was not to our taste.
I don’t support such ratings. First, the absence of policies and supervisions allows producers to earn high ratings by all means. Chances are that top priority is given to advertisement, which is an open invitation to misleading information. Eventually, ratings rely heavily on investment inadvertisement rather than the quality of services. Besides, it is not uncommon for individuals to follow the crowd blindly without critical thinking.They take it for granted that ratings definitely equal popularity. Actually, many products are targeted at special consumers, whose experience tends to be exaggerated and influences others.
So, it is safe to conclude that ratings of purchases, if not handled properly, weigh against the development of a healthy market and cause unfair marketcompetitions
(正文130个词)
Tips:
1.the absence of…缺乏
也可以用:There is no…,但是这个句型我比较喜欢用抽象名词作主语来替换,这样就省去了一个定语从句。
2.allow sb to do…这里表达的是“使某人……”。表达使动概念,不一定用make。
3.by all means无论如何。
实际上这里我本来用by hook or by crook(不择手段),但考生考场上很难想到,而且不能保证阅卷人第一眼能识别出来,就舍弃了。
4.chances are that…有可能
这是我代替it is likely that..的一个句型,超级顺手
5.表示重视的词组:give top priority to…
此类词组一共有32组,请参看本文:
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6.be an open invitation to很大的诱因
这是教材模块7的一个词块,被我代替cause, be responsible for
7.rely heavily on过度依赖于
8.rather than不是
9. it is not uncommon for…对于……是一个常见的现象
10. follow the crowd随大流
11. critical thinking批判思维
12. take it for granted that…想当然认为
13. be targeted at目标在于
14. tend to往往
15. it is safe to conclude that…可以稳妥得出这样结论……
16. if not handled properly,省略句结构
17. weigh against对……不利
末段也是借鉴2016年和2014年的范文:
In short, internet voting, to someextent, is unfair, if not immoral, and cannot be trusted.Therefore, rules should be worked out and strictly observed. Everyone in oursociety should help those in need, but it is more important to be sincere andearnest.
So, it’s safe to conclude that it is reasonable to include English which facilitatesdaily communication.
完整的文章:
Ratings for commodities are a double-edged sword.They can help consumers make sound decisions, but sometimes mislead consumers and bring about complaints. The two stories presented above are typical examples.
I don’t support such ratings. First, the absence of policies and supervisions allows producers to earn highratings by all means. Chances are that top priority is given to advertisement, which is an open invitation tomisleading information. Eventually, ratings rely heavily on investment inadvertisement rather than the quality of services. Besides, it is not uncommon for individuals to follow the crowd blindly without critical thinking.They take it for granted that ratings definitely equal popularity. Actually, many products are targeted at special consumers, whose experience tends to be exaggerated and influences others.
So, it is safe to conclude that ratings of purchases, if not handled properly, weigh against the development of a healthy market and cause unfair marketcompetitions
高考英语作文多增10分的劲爆预测!
【预测话题】
传统文化
【预测题目】
假如你叫李华,你的美国笔友Tom对中国的传统节日非常感兴趣。他想请你介绍你最喜欢的一个节日,如中秋节、端午节、春节等,你通常是怎么庆祝的,以及你喜欢这个节日的原因。请你根据他的问题回复邮件。
提示词语:eat, get together, share, happy, special
【参考范文】
Hi! Tom,
I’m glad to hear that you are interested in traditional Chinese festivals.
My favorite festival is the Mid-Autumn Festival. It usually comes in September or October. On that day, our family members usually get together and have a nice meal. After that, I always admire the moon and share mooncakes with my families.
I love this festival because I like eating mooncakes. They are in the shape of a full moon. They carry people’s wishes to the families they love and miss. In short, the Mid-Autumn Festival is a day of pleasure and happiness.
I hope that my letter will help you know more about Chinese festivals.
Yours,
Li Hua
2017年高考英语写作极有可能采用应用文进行考查,比如留言条。
【预测作文】留言条
【预测题目】
假设你是高三学生李华,星期天你要和你的同班同学李明一起去敬老院参加义务劳动,你去找他,但他没有在家,你给他留言说明要求,内容如下:
(1)9:30在学校门口集合;
(2)带劳动工具(洗衣粉、理发工具、除草工具等);
(3)自带午饭,骑自行车前往。
注意:
(1)词数100左右;
(2)可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
【参考范文】
Dear Li Ming,
This Sunday we'll go to the nursing home and do some voluntary labor. You were out, when I dropped in on you. Therefore, I had to leave a message to you.
We'll meet at the gate of our school at 9:30 tomorrow morning and start out together by bike. So you should take your bike. And don't forget to take some washing powder, barber tools and weeding tools so that we can help them with washing clothes, cutting their hair and get rid of some weed in the garden. At last, you should remember to take some food for lunch because we'll stay there for chatting with them at noon.
If you come back, please phone me at once.
Yours
Li Hua
共享单车无疑是今年的火爆热点之一,它为我们的生活带来了极大的便利。语文高考作文话题都有:共享单车。
【预测话题】共享单车
【预测题目】
假定你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国朋友Jim在给你的邮件中提到他对中国新近出现的一种共享单车“mobike”很感兴趣,并请你做个简要介绍。请你给Jim回信,内容包括:
1. 这种单车的使用方法(如:APP查看车辆、扫码开锁等);
2. 这种单车的优势;
3. 你对这种单车的看法。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
提示词:智能手机 smartphone, 二维码 the QR code
【参考范文】
Dear Jim,
I’m writing to tell you more about the new form of sharing bike--mobike mentioned in your latest letter.
It’s very convenient to use if you have a smartphone. What you do is to find a nearest mobike through the APP, scan the QR code on the bike, and enjoy your trip.
Compared to other forms of sharing bike, the greatest advantage of mobike is that you can easily find one and never worry about where to park it. It is becoming a new trend as a means of transportation, which relieves the traffic pressure and does good to the environment as well.
Hope to ride a mobike with you in China.
Yours,
Li Hua
节约是中华人民的传统美德,然而,当前国人的浪费现象却十分严重,尤其是餐桌上的浪费。请用英语写一篇100-120词的短文,描述你的一次“餐桌浪费”经历,并结合当前的“光盘行动”(Clear Your Plate Campaign)略加评论。
With large amounts of food thrown away each year, the problem of food waste is widespread in China. Last Spring Festival, my father invited several friends to dinner in a restaurant. My father ordered a lot to show respect and display generosity.
What surprised me was he ordered an extra dish before we could finish all! When we stood up to leave, there were many dishes unfinished. Out of embarrassment, my father was reluctant to take the leftovers home. Later, we all shared the opinion that it was a great waste.
Recently, the Clear Your Plate Campaign started nationwide. I firmly believe that if everyone does his bit, the food waste will be significantly reduced.
n the bike, and enjoy your trip.
Compared to other forms of sharing bike, the greatest advantage of mobike is that you can easily find one and never worry about where to park it. It is becoming a new trend as a means of transportation, which relieves the traffic pressure and does good to the environment as well.
Hope to ride a mobike with you in China.
Yours,
Li Hua